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    I think there are some perspective issues in the first panel - her waist is drawn like it's parallel with the horizon. I would raise the character or lower the background. The cabinet edge on the right of that panel also makes it seem like it's a separate panel. I don't really have an issue with the gun breaking the panel border, but it does lead your eye back up to the top of the page, maybe have it pointing to the right. But I'm just picking nits, here. It's really a very cool sequence, better than a lot of published books these days. I'm definitely going to take a look at the previous pages.

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    I think your improving well
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    Thank you for feedback, Chris. I appreciate it.

    Good eye catching that first panel. I see it now.

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    Thanks Bryan

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