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Thread: Hours Short Story pt 2

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    Pencilling Hours Short Story pt 2

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    Looka good! My only real complaint is shelves are way too big. And I'm not sure what's happening on the first page

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    Perspective is more than lines radiating from a point. It's about scale over distance.

    Perspective starts with two educated decisions and everything else is dominoes falling down

    IF Wounded-man™ AND the horizon are correct, THEN everything else in the drawing is wrong.

    The woman is twice as tall as Wounded-man™, the door is too short, the shelves too high, shelf count needs to double, get kick plate to ankle height, reduce jars to a size than can be lifted by normal humans. If you can't go to the store, do an image search for grocery shelves.

    Note: ANY two starting decisions the artist makes are automatically correct. You could just as easily decide the woman and the door are correct and you'd be right BUT, again, everything else in the drawing would then be wrong.



    According to YOU the blue line below has a 90º bend and all the red lines are straight. If we look we see this is untrue. What happened? You broke the perspective which breaks the drawing. IF there's an horizon in the shot, THEN you can employ 1pt, 2pt or 4pt perspective but NEVER 3pt. This is NOT optional! IF there's a VP below the horizon (and you said there is) THEN there MUST be a VP above! Again, this is NOT optional!

    You can:
    Raise or lower the horizon out of the frame
    Go 4 pt which means all straight lines must curve (huge headache and time killer)
    Drop the 3rd pt and go 1 pt or 2 point


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    Wow...Great advice....My 2-cents from the hip...loose the halo effect...it kills a story for most readers all the time...just some thought...
    Keep that pencil busy!
    Keep that Pencil Busy!

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    Looks good. I do love that splash panel with the woman stabbing the man.

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    Thanks so much for all the awesome advice, im using everything i learn from you all to get better. How's my story telling though? Can you all follow it? what can i do to improve the story telling aspect?

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