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    a short story i made for my friends birthday!!

    Last edited by Veritas71; 07-02-2017 at 10:48 AM. Reason: Added images

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    I see lots of work here..But! it could be a style I'm not familiar...The art is not that convincing to me ( Just an old artist opinion )..Of course I'm from the old school...but things should be convincing and keep the reader in the story...or we the reader fall out of the story...and you failed 1 of the 4 rules...1 Keep it simple...2 Keep it interesting...3 Don't get too artsy we fall out of the story ( your anatomy )...4 make us want to turn the page...
    Keep up the hard work...story telling with out words..
    Keep that Pencil Busy!

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    thank you for the advise!!! it was my first attempt to make a story and not just a picture. i didnt understand exactly which rule i failed (my english are a little bad i know).

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    Quote Originally Posted by tompania View Post
    thank you for the advise!!! it was my first attempt to make a story and not just a picture. i didnt understand exactly which rule i failed (my english are a little bad i know).
    Like all of us here...Keep working on your anatomy...right now it's a bit wonky which is taking away from your story...remember to not get discouraged...there is no fail....it's an on going process
    Keep that Pencil Busy!

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    thank you very much i appreciate your advise. i would like you to take a look in something i made recently( the above post was sketched 5 months ago) if you want of course (https://tompania.deviantart.com/art/...ry-2-689994852). and don't worry there is no discourage i post my stuff to hear some critisism

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    Your definitely improving...your work reminds me of Barry Smith kinda
    Keep that Pencil Busy!

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    that's nice! thanks a lot!!

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