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    Court-martial

    I'm open to critiques.


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    Officers and gentlemen do not wear hats indoors. Officers do not wear rumpled pajamas (at least in public) sharpen up those unis. The top Army button goes at the nipple not below the navel, get those buttons UP (Navy wears double breasted). Officers do not slouch in their chairs like stoned out surfer dudes. Sit up, sit straight, get feet under the table, this is serious business.

    Perspective is more than lines radiating from a point, it's about projecting scale as well. Panel 1, characters sit at the ends of 8 foot long ping pong tables; Panel 4, they sit at the sides of narrow strips; Panel 6 they sit next to shelves. All are wrong. Take the proportions from a table suitable for the occasion and keep it's size consistent. Keep space between tables consistent. Panel 4, keep plagues in front of seats not off to the side (don't forget to add them in panel 1) Panels 3&5 mix 1 and 2 pt perspective; choose one or the other but not both in the same panel. Panels 4&6 the tables cut the officer's bodies in half. EEK!

    Army officers wear insignia on shoulder epaulets, enlisted men wear chevrons on upper sleeves. You give no indication of rank on any. Show the ranks. Navy uses stripes on sleeves in dress blues (shoulder insignia on whites) Is the Naval officer a Lt or Lt jg? You indicate both, one on either arm. Jg has the thin stripe on top, not bottom. Either way the space between stripes is narrower than a thin stripe not twice the width of a wide stripe.

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    Quote Originally Posted by Smitty View Post
    Officers and gentlemen do not wear hats indoors. Officers do not wear rumpled pajamas (at least in public) sharpen up those unis. The top Army button goes at the nipple not below the navel, get those buttons UP (Navy wears double breasted). Officers do not slouch in their chairs like stoned out surfer dudes. Sit up, sit straight, get feet under the table, this is serious business.

    Perspective is more than lines radiating from a point, it's about projecting scale as well. Panel 1, characters sit at the ends of 8 foot long ping pong tables; Panel 4, they sit at the sides of narrow strips; Panel 6 they sit next to shelves. All are wrong. Take the proportions from a table suitable for the occasion and keep it's size consistent. Keep space between tables consistent. Panel 4, keep plagues in front of seats not off to the side (don't forget to add them in panel 1) Panels 3&5 mix 1 and 2 pt perspective; choose one or the other but not both in the same panel. Panels 4&6 the tables cut the officer's bodies in half. EEK!

    Army officers wear insignia on shoulder epaulets, enlisted men wear chevrons on upper sleeves. You give no indication of rank on any. Show the ranks. Navy uses stripes on sleeves in dress blues (shoulder insignia on whites) Is the Naval officer a Lt or Lt jg? You indicate both, one on either arm. Jg has the thin stripe on top, not bottom. Either way the space between stripes is narrower than a thin stripe not twice the width of a wide stripe.
    Thanks a lot for those details Smitty. I know it takes a while to type them up but I appreciate it.


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